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I sit waiting in the sun.
At the door,
A brow appears;
Pretentious and vain, but

Curved, fiery, warm.
It rises, I bid him in.
The sun sets;
We sink in a pool of blood,

Rippling under the palm of a hand.
A cheek appears,
A faint smile, a broken lip:
So red, an open scar.

The moon rises slowly-
Sharp, vengeful crescent-
And disappears behind
Two black of eyes, impatient, eager.

A sour touch, a bite.
A stream of crimson on my lip,
And before I can think, I fall
Back where I belong:

To the darkness.
Broad arms, a rush.
An icy chill up my spine,
But no more as I feel

A strong yellow heat
That tans the skin.
©2007-2009 ~ranuul
:iconranuul:

Author's Comments


My first poem ever submitted.
It is also the first poem I ever managed to finish writing correctly. I wrote this one a few months ago... when I still had inspiration.
Well, I'm quite satisfied with it... I hope you like it...

The form of writing is a bit freestyle (no rhymes, no metric). I think it qualifies in the surrealist style...

A bit of background: well I wrote this after a bad day. The fact is I woke up in the middle of the night after a weird dream and had this strange urge to write something about it.
Actually the poem is not exactly like the dream... but I tried to evoke the impressions I had during.

Well I'm open to comments if you have any.



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:iconfrayedmothofthedeep:
Very different from other romantic poems I was scanning through. Different of course being good.
:iconranuul:
Thanks actually because I usually don't write poems like these... Normally I prefer to stick to rules and follow a rhyming scheme or metric. So this is the first time I actually throw away the rulebook ;)

--
"Give up all hope of ever seeing Heaven : I come to lead you to the other shore, into eternal darkness, ice, and fire."
(Dante, The Divine Comedy, Canto III)

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